Comments on: Emotionless Words https://rachelgraves.com/2010/11/30/emotionless-words/ Urban Fantasy, Paranormal Cozy Mysteries, and Paranormal Romance Wed, 01 Dec 2010 15:41:32 +0000 hourly 1 By: Jami Gold https://rachelgraves.com/2010/11/30/emotionless-words/comment-page-1/#comment-3 Wed, 01 Dec 2010 15:41:32 +0000 http://www.rachelgraves.info/?p=34#comment-3 Oh, good use of this snarky video to illustrate a point! 🙂 And your last example uses tags to their best ability. But you know me, I try to avoid tags. I’d rather have action beats to show emotion.

He met her gaze. “I’m going to be an author.”
Her brows arched. “Have you read any books?”
“No. But I’m going to write a best seller.”
She couldn’t help an eye roll. “I’ve never even seen you with a book.”
“I saw all of the Harry Potter movies.” He waved away her concern.
She straightened and stared him down. “That’s not the same thing.”

Still not great, because I’d actually break that up with internal monologue in a real manuscript, but I was sticking to your point of how to show emotions on the page. 🙂

]]> By: dwkazzie https://rachelgraves.com/2010/11/30/emotionless-words/comment-page-1/#comment-2 Wed, 01 Dec 2010 00:43:31 +0000 http://www.rachelgraves.info/?p=34#comment-2 Hi, I wrote the “so you want to write a novel” video, and I was really intrigued by your analysis of the dialogue. it’s something i work very hard at in my own writing, and it’s especially tough to make it sound natural in this computer-generated voice setting. Good blog post.

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